Animatic Feedback

Our original idea used 3 teenage girls as they would be more vulnerable to the killer. It then followed each of the girls on their way home as they separate off from each other to show that they are alone. As each girl was shown to separate off from the group the image would flick from that scene and the killer placing a photo of that character dead to suggest her murder. The ending would then show a photo of all three of the girls with the two dead ones being crossed off.

Feedback from the class and teacher suggested that in our original idea we showed to much of the plot therefore not leaving a lot to the imagination, so the viewer would not be asking questions about what is going to happen as the narrative would be quite straight forward.

After this we decided to change our narrative. we thought that we would change the stereotypical idea of three teenage girls being in danger, to one girl and two boys. We did this to go against the traditional generic convention of female vulnerability in a thriller by the two males being the ones who are killed, leaving just the female who is now vulnerable by herself, even though she is the only one to have survived so far. This helps raise questions, example, Why is only the female left?

We then cut out a lot of the town narrative to focus more on the killer's planning and the the single photo being taken and developed, rather than explaining to the audience how the teenagers separate off and are killed. This raise more questions, therefore creating more suspense.